Correction de anglais

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Navrée je viens tout juste de me connecter. j'espère qu'il n'est pas trop tard. Je pense avoir corrigée toutes tes fautes (enfin je crois^^)

Cristiano Ronaldo was born on the 5th of February, 1985 in Madeira, Portugal as Cristiano Ronaldo Dos Santos Aveiro. He has become one of the best football players in the world.

Cristiano Ronaldo, has two sisters and one brother. His brother’s name is Hugo and one sister's name is Ronalda (Katia).

Cristiano Ronaldo was discovered in his teen years when he was playing for the Portuguese team Sporting Lisbon. Since the year 2003, when the Sporting Lisbon beat Manchester United, the Manchester United leaders signed the contract with Ronaldo and now he is a football player for Real Madrid football team in Spain.

His player number is the 7 and Cristiano Ronaldo has played for Portugal very successfully at the Olympic Games in the year 2004, where he scored 10 goals in 24 games for Portugal.
He wins with his team the FA Cup winner (2004), Euro 2004 finalist (2004), UEFA Team of the Year (2004); FA Cup finalist (2005).
Cristiano Ronaldo has played for Sporting Lisbon and is playing now for Real Madrid of Spain.
I admire him well it’s that what he want to be in his real live a football player.






Voilà! Bonne nuit! et encore désolée pour le retard, mais je n'étais pas au courant que je faisais beta-reader d'anglais, mais bon!^^

Bonjour pouvez vous faire ca vas pas plus que 220 words svp;


Instructions:

Write an article (130-150 words) for a student magazine about a famous sportsperson from the past (someone who has retired or died).Include paragraphs on three or four of these topics and your own ideas.

 family
 early year and education
 first experience of sport
 early succeses
 greatest achivements
 why you admire him/her

The Article:

About a famous sportsperson:

Eusébio da Silva Ferreira, born 25 January 1942 commonly known simply as Eusébio, is a retired Portuguese football forward.
He is considered one of the best footballers of all-time, by the IFFHS*.
He helped the Portuguese national team reach third place at the 1966 World Cup, being the top goalscorer of the tournament with nine goals (six of which were scored at Goodison Park) and was elected the European Footballer of the Year in 1965.
He played for Benfica for 15 years, and is the team's all-time top scorer.

About his family

He has a mother e father and a brother.

Early years and education
He moved to Lisbon in his late teens, after joining Benfica as an 18-year-old from his local club, Sporting Club of Lourenço Marques.
Benfica discovered Eusébio due to the efforts of former Brazilian player José Carlos Bauer, who saw him in Lourenço Marques in 1960. Eusébio could run the 100m in 11 seconds. Bauer recommended Eusébio first to his former club, São Paulo, but the Tricolor turned him down. Bauer then discussed Eusébio with his former coach in São Paulo, Béla Guttmann, who was coaching Benfica at the time.

First experience of sport
Eusébio used to play in Sporting's feeder club in Mozambique. Benfica wanted to pay Eusébio in a contract to go while Sporting wanted to take him [to Portugal] as a junior player for the experience with no monetary reward. Benfica made a nice approach. They went to speak to his mum, his brother, and offered €1,000 for three years. His brother asked for double and they paid it. They signed the contract with his mother and she got the money.



Early successes

Eusébiu Nickname is ‘’The Black Panther", or "The Black Pearl", Eusébio scored 727 goals for Benfica in 715 games
He is also known for his speed and his powerful, accurate right-footed strike. He is considered Benfica's and Portugal's most renowned player and, along with Just Fontaine, one of the first world-class African strikers. He was elected the 9th best footballer of the 20th century in a poll by the IFFHS.[2] Pelé named Eusébio as one of the 125 best living footballers in his 2004 FIFA 100 list.
In November 2003, to celebrate UEFA's Jubilee, he was selected as the Golden Player of Portugal by the Portuguese Football Federationas their most outstanding player of the past 50 years.
He is the first player to win the European Golden Shoe award.

Greatest achivements

An extraordinarly quick and powerful midfielder, Eusebio was the Portuguese League's top scorer seven times (1964-68, 1970, 1973), was named European footballer of the year (1965), and led Benfica to a European Cup (1962) and 11 league championships (1961-65, 1967-74). He also played (1961-73) on Portugal's national team.

Why you admire him/her

I admire him well he is a professional soccer player and well he is play very good football.







IFFHS *=International Federation of Football History & Statistics

Je suis là pour corriger (enfin apparement^^), pas ppor faire ton travail. Par contre lorsque tu auras terminé tu eux bien sur m'envoyer ton devoir pour que je le corrige.
Bon courage, avec un peu de concentration tu arriveras facilement. Et si tu as des questions n'hésite pas a les poser.