Forum corriger un devoir en anglais

Bonjour je m'appelle Laura, j'ai un exposé à faire en anglais devant ma classe, ce qui me fait déjà très peur et en plus j'ai beaucoup de lacunes en anglais !! Je voudrais savoir si vous pouvez m'aider sur la forme de mon exposé, sur mes propos éventuellement mais surtout sur les problèmes de syntaxe ou de mots mal traduits. J'essaye de faire des phrases simples. Dites moi au moins si je peux me présenter avec ça sans passer pour une quiche. C'est exposé m'angoisse beaucoup.

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Firearms in USA

The America is the country we can reach most easily firearms. We list more than 200 million weapons in this country. The Americans buy a rifle as they would buy one microwaves, for them a firearms is necessary for their security.

Firearms are an important part of the American culture since the period of the pioneers. They used their rifle to protect itself from Indians and from wild animals. The second amendment declares that the carrying of weapons is a right which must be broken.

The access to weapons is controlled by the law, but the regulations vary according to States. Texas is an over liberal State while New Jersey is stricter.

The NRA is a lobby, it’s in favour of firearms, it is very influential, it opposes to the creation of new laws against the carrying of weapons.

This pressure group leans on the amendment 2, according to them they are people rather than weapons the cause of deaths by bullet.

The school-shooting is a subject sensitive to the USA. It demonstrates that children can be killed by weapons but especially that they can have access there easily.

School shooting has an impact on the market. The industry of the firearm is afraid of being dragged in justice as was in the tobacco industry, as far as sales stagnate.

Have a firearm when we have children is extremely dangerous. The risk of accident is very strong. Some minutes of inattention, the child finds that he thinks of being a toy and can kill or kill other person in an accidental way. The number of this kind of accidents does not stop growing.

Certain States demand parents a certain attention and what the weapon is put under bolt in an inaccessible place for the child.

A shooting in the Scotland for Dublane made the authorities react which strengthened the laws, while in the USA no legislative measure was taken.

For political reasons, no politician wants to attack the amendment 2.

A 8-year-old child killed his father and the other one men of four bullets each, near Phoenix. His father had him led previously to fire at animals.

We count 62 cases of children of 7 or 8 orders for murder in the USA between 1976 and 2005.

In the Illinois, a 10-month-old baby received a licence of bearing of arms after his father filled form on internet. This State is considered as one of the most severe of the USA for the laws on weapons, but the age does not seem to be important for him.

On the photo, a 12-year-old child plays with weapon during a meeting of the NRA
Louisville -16 may 2008

There are several lobbies against weapons, for example, the Million mom march, which disentangles the day of the Mother's Day and gathers housewives.

192 million firearms are held by private individuals in the country (on a population of 260 million inhabitants) and the manslaughter remains the cause of the most important mortality among the 20-year-old young people (20 % of the deaths).

The legislation concerning firearms was never so strict as at the moment in the United States. We count more than 40 000 federal laws controlling the carrying of weapons.

Many people want an intensification of the law, but 74% of the population is against a total banishment of firearms.

However the availability of firearms doesn’t explain manslaughter’s low rate.

In 2009, in Ohio, a 4 year old child fired with a firearm at his babysitter, fortunately he was just hurt in the arm.

Gary Kleck, criminologist, determined that firearms are used in defensive title in more than 2 million cases a year in the United States. The official statistics wear to believe that they would serve on the other hand to commit approximately a million murders.

• in May 21st, 1998: a fifteen-year-old pupil excluded temporarily from the high school of Springfield fires with a rifle in the cafeteria of the school, killing two teenagers and hurting twenty three others. He had previously murdered his parents.

• in February 19th, 1997. A sixteen-year-old high school student kills the head master and the pupil with its pump-action shotgun in a high school in Alaska, two high school students are hurt. He was condemned for a double punishment of ninety-nine years of prison. He can go out only in 115 years.

• in May 1st, 1992. A twenty-year-old young man brings down four persons and hurts it ten others in his former high school in California, he wanted to take revenge to have failed in his examinations. He was sentenced to death.

• in January 17th, 1989. A tramp of twenty four years, fires with a kalachnikov in the court of one the nursery school in California. Five children are killed and twenty nine other wounded persons as well as a teacher. The young man kills then.