Correction lettre de motivation (anglais)

Bonjour,
Je suis en classe de 3ème, mon professeur a organisé un voyage pour l'Angleterre seulement voila, je dois écrire une lettre de motivation(anglais). Comme mon niveau en anglais laisse à désirer je vous serai très reconnaissant de bien vouloir me la corriger.

Mrs,

I am currently 3rd class at the college Marcel Pagnol in Saint-Ouen-l’Aumône, I would like to participate in the trip English of 01/05/2010 to 05/05/2010.

This trip to England I would find out what country I ever visited, and improve my English. One week, it is very short to learn English but I shall do my best to practise most my English.

I'm still very invested and rigorous in all that I undertake.
Besides, I'm very enthusiastic, always smiling and listening to people, my relational ease made that I adapt myself very well.

I’m at your service in order to persuade you by word of mouth of my competences and my motivation.

I ask you to agree to Madam, my salutation distinguished.

Ok, merci.

Salut,

Mrs,

I am currently 3rd class studying in 9th grade at the college ( college veut dire université) Marcel Pagnol middle school in Saint-Ouen-l’Aumône, I would like to participate in the trip English to England of from 01/05/2010 to 05/05/2010.

This trip to England I would find out what country I ever visited ( si tu veux dire que ce voyage te permettra de decouvrir un nouveau pays c'est This trip to England would be an opportunity for me to discover a country I never had the chance to visit, and to improve my English. One week is very short to learn English but I shall do my best to practise most my English the most

I'm still always very invested and rigorous in all that I undertake.
Besides, I'm very enthusiastic, always smiling and listening to people, my relational ease made that I adapt myself very well. ( ca se dit pas je pense dit plutôt I'm very open-minded and adapt easily to a new environment.

I’m at your service in order to persuade you by word of mouth of my competences and my motivation. I'm available at any time to discuss this trip to England and my motivations

I ask you to agree to Madam, my salutation distinguished. Yours faithfully


J'espère avoir pu t'aider

Merci misseurydice =).

De rien, j'espère que tu vas le faire ce voyage, l'Angleterre c'est super, j'y suis allée quand j'étais en 3eme aussi.

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