Aide pour corriger faute lettre de motivation en anglais

Subject: Training period application.

Dear Sir,

I'm currently in a master's degree: banking and economy at the University of Toulouse.
For my diploma, it is essential to have a work experience in a bank.
I am hoping to work for an international firm and would be particularly pleased to have some training
in your firm which keeps developing.

This training period would enable me to gain the knowledge of financial analysis, risk management, financial market … These knowledge are vitals for my occupational integration.
Indeed, I intend to become a business development manager after my diploma.
Moreover, a placement in your firm would make me improve my English.

As you can see on my resume, I’ve been working several times for many firms. I would like to pay attention on my experience in banking. I’ve been assistant to the business development manager at the “Banque Populaire”.
It has made me catch a glimpse of the banking world, which I would like to discover more inside the HSBC Bank.

I would be very grateful if you would agree to give me a placement in your firm from 01 April to 30 august 2010.


Yours faithfully