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Bonsoir ,
Quelqu'un aurai une second a corriger ma rédaction d'anglais  
Voila en anglais :
A fisherman Solomon Vandy, his village in Sierra Leone Shenge attacked by rebels of the Revolutionary United Front. His family managed to escape, but he learns that his son Dia was captured by force as a child soldier by the RUF. Solomon Vandy is also captured by the RUF
who send in the mine Konot, where he discovered a "blood diamond" of an exceptionally size,call "jewel pink", it succeeds to hide the diamond, thanks to the army camp
. once released, he meets Danny Archer, a former soldier who was born in Rhodesia white mercenary and Maddy Bowen. Archer suggested that Solomon find his family in exchange for sharing the sale of diamonds.
A fisherman Solomon Vandy, his village in Sierra Leone Shenge attacked by rebels of the Revolutionary United Front. His family managed to escape, but he learns that his son Dia was captured by force as a child soldier by the RUF. Solomon Vandy is also captured by the RUF
who send in the mine Konot, where he discovered a "blood diamond" of an exceptionally size,call "jewel pink", it succeeds to hide the diamond, thanks to the army camp
. once released, he meets Danny Archer, a former soldier who was born in Rhodesia white mercenary and Maddy Bowen. Archer suggested that Solomon find his family in exchange for sharing the sale of diamonds.

Puis francais :

Un pêcheur Solomon Vandy, son village en Sierra Leone Shenge attaqué par des rebelles du Revolutionary United Front. Sa famille a réussi à s'échapper, mais il apprend que son fils Dia a été capturé par la force comme enfant soldat par le RUF. Solomon Vandy est aussi capturé par le RUF
qui envoient à la mine Konot, où il a découvert un "diamant de sang» d'une taille exceptionnelle, appelez le "bijou rose», il réussit à cacher le diamant, grâce au camp de l'armée
. une fois libérés, il rencontre Danny Archer, un ancien soldat, qui est né en Rhodésie mercenaires blancs et Maddy Bowen. Archer a suggéré que Solomon retrouverais sa famille en échange du partage de la vente de sont diamants.

Merci