Texte en anglais

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(Je garantie pas de super correction, ça se peut que je me plante)

Alors je rajoute des notes en bleu, c'est soit des corrections, soit des.. notes entre crochets surtout

[Peut-être mettre computer au pluriel] Computers was were created in 1955 by François Girard. At the beginning, in black and white, it they was were reserved to the richest. Nowadays, everyone has at least one computer set in their house. Computers is are considered as an essential technology and the future is in the data processing.The computers recently became an indispensable [va en avant de object me semble] object indispensable. It is a tool "by which you can create, learn, communicate and having fun." -- > "mainly used for creating, learning, communication and fun."

Indeed, the computers now replaces now our sheets of paper. It They can be used to create as well as correct [j'enlèverais ça] the whole of our documents such as the letters, the summaries, the memos, etc. Moreover, Ccomputers can inform adults too, about world's events, documentaries, sports, thanks to internet.
Subsequently, it [? peut-être "we" au lieu de "it"] can use the computer as a true working tool for our childrens. It They can help them to read, write and improve their performance in [pas sure pour les majuscules] Math and Science. In addition, it will enable us to communicate via internet and "this live with new people through groups, Clubs, organization, etc." j'ai pas bien saisi la phrase, peut-être remplacer toute la phrase par "In addition, it (will c'est au futur, mais ce qui suit est déjà au présent me semble) allows us to communicate, via internet, to people all over the Earth"
It also allows us to also communicate with the [pourquoi pas "our"] family, friends, clients through the instant messages, the so-called e-mail without being face to face. Then, it allows us to buy and sell various object over the internet various object. The site more known in the field is Eebay. Finally, in order to entertain us, the computer can become a very good tool of relaxation.
It can be used to listen to music or watch videos and films which are on the internet. We knowcan use, the computer to play games such as the puzzles, of adventure games, etc. However, Ccomputers doesn't [don't ou do not] have only positive points. More serious again [j'enlèverais le again], there are some the people who pass some sleepless nights beeing on computer anything that with the computer and consequence they have lacks of sleep in consequence.

In conclusion, iIn a word, cComputers hashave positive and negative points, but all depends on what you use them for of what you use. In my opinion,
parents should be more attentive of what children do on computers use. The computers allows us to carry out various tasks and ca ? more quickly. "It brings together in a single object several tools such as the dictionary, English, etc. " -- > They combine several tools like the English dictionnary, English learning programs, etc.
Thanks to its search engine Internet allows us to access to several a large database of informations and this, in a click.



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