Anglais, Expression écrite

Bonjour, je suis en première L, j'ai fais une expression écrite en anglais. Serait-il possible que quelqu'un me corrige les fautes ?


I intend to live in New York City so as to spend one or two years to work as an au pair. I think, live abroad during some years is an enriching experience, firstly to improve our knowledge of a language and secondly to discover another culture completely different from our.
I’d like to be an au pair there because, I love taking care of children, I’ve done it many times, but never fulltime, I would dread but I think the magic of the place will make the job easier.
I’ve chosen New York because; it’s a city which always fascinated me, I feel to know this city without being gone, thanks to all information I look for and television. It stands for the perfect lively city, with lights everywhere, the crowd and the longs streets. It’s there where we can see the yellow cab on the 5th avenue, to cross the Brooklyn Bridge and admire the skyline, to go at the top of the Empire State Building to see the city illuminated or to rest in Central Park happily. Besides, I think New York is a city where there are less prejudices, I can’t imagine the Naked cowboy who is in Times Square at the heart of Lyon or even Paris.
To sum up, spend some years in New York is an essential step of my life, and even if I know it’ll be hard, I really want to do it even if, I’m sure I’ll miss many things.

Merci d'avance !!
Bise.