Correction d'un devoir d'Anglais

Bonjour à tous.

J'ai un devoir de pré-rentrée à réaliser. Voici le sujet :

"Select one article (length 400-500 words) which you are actually interested in. Prepare a little oral presentation first summarizing the mainelements of the text, perhaps the journalist’s aim in writing it, and then explaining why you
chose this subject in general and this article in particular."

J'ai choisi l'article suivant :
http://www.guardian.co.uk/environm [...] dtransport

Je vous copie ci-dessous mon travail.
Je sais que c'est un peu long mais si quelqu'un a le courage de me corriger les fautes de langues majeures, ça m'aiderai beaucoup...
Voila, merci à celui qui aura la gentillesse de me lire et la bonté de corriger.

I chose an article extracted from the Guardian, written on the Wednesday Thirtieth July by Graham Keeley and entitled “Spain to cut speed limit in bid to reduce oil imports”. This article examines economic problems encountered by Spain because of rising fuel costs and presents the different measures proposed by Spain's socialist government in order to struggle against these problems.
Nowadays, all countries in the world are regarded by the phenomenal rise of oil price but Spain is especially concerned. Indeed, as it is said in the article, among European countries, Spain has the highest dependency on fossil fuels, that is, hydrocarbons found within the top layer of the Earth’s crust (oil, natural gas, coal) and thus, Spain spends much money for oil imports. For example, we can read that, last year, the country spent 17 milliards importing oil.
That’s why, Miguel Sebastián, the industry minister, presented a governmental plan whose the aim is to reduce Spain's oil imports by 10% per year which would represent a saving of 4,14 milliards euros.
This plan, which concerns all activity sectors, includes several measures, about thirty. The main measures are presented in the article. There are two very important measures.
The first one and certainly the most outstanding is the lowering of speed limits. Speed limits are to be reduce on dual carriageways outside major cities by 20%.
The second is the replacement in the houses of traditional bulbs, electricity guzzlers, by free energy-saving light bulbs. For this project, the government will hand out 49 millions free energy-saving light bulbs – two for each household.
The article states many other measures such as a reduction of public lighting up to 50%, the later opening of metro system in many cities in order to encourage people to take public transports, the manufacture of electric or hybrid cars, the utilisation of biofuels by Spanish government vehicles... The governement wants also to reduce the electricity consumption in public buildings. That’s why temperature won’t have to fall under 21 degrees celcius and to rise beyond 26 degrees celcius, summer like winter.
Here are the main measures.
But the article explains that this plan doesn’t delight everyone. Indeed, people are not always energy conscious and some of them refuse to respect the news measures, notably the measures which concern their speed.
Graham Keeley, the journalist, doesn’t directly express his opinion. Nevertheless, we can notice that he isn’t totally objective. He seems to be rather favourable to the project. Indeed, he evokes but not really developps the single objection at this project. He quotes only the remark of a person (Manolo) but he does’nt comment on this quotation. Moreover, he gives outstanding figures and he brings back famous quotations such as “Ask not what your country can do for you, ask what you can do for your country” in order to draw readers’ attention and alarm them. We can so deduce that the journalist’s aim in writing this article is to denounce an important economic problem which must be resolved but also to indirectly promote the spain governmental plan. This observation isn’t surprising if we know that editorial articles in The Guardian are generally to the left of the political spectrum.

I have finished my summary, so let me explain to you why I chose this subject in general and this article in particular.
I chose to talk about rising oil costs because it is a very important and current economic problem which seems to me to be interesting for young students in trade and economy.
Indeed, fuel price has reached records this summer. For instance, in New York, barrel price of Light Sweet Crude Oil exceeded 145 dollars at the beginning of July whereas it was just exceeding 50 dollars at the end of January 2007. And according to some economists, barrel could reach 300 dollars within 2015.
If governments are particulary concerned, each one among us is also affected.
We can notice that we are already experiencing a silent revolution in your ways of life. Whereas people were all oil guzzlers, nowaydays, people, panicstricken by rising costs, have changed their customs. For example, people limit their displacements, people try to organize covoiturage...
More personnaly now, I think that this increase particularly affects young people who have just obtained their driving licence and so, I think that this subject particulary concerns us. Fuel problem is a problem which is suddenly unveiled in front of us. Me, when I obtained my driving licence, I was very happy and I said : “This summer, I will go here, there, here...”. A single crossing of the service station was sufficient to calm me.
I thus felt particularly concerned by this main issue, that’s why I chose this subject.
I chose this article in particular firstly because I found it very complete and synthetic : it presents the problem, it gives solutions and it denounces difficulties to institute them and secondly because it is an article which leads us to discuss.
To begin, the choose of an article which talks about Spain for an english homework could appear surprising but let me recall that Spain is the country the most dependent on fossil fuels among all European countries whith an annual expense for oil imports which reachs to 17 milliars euros, that is 1,55 % of his gross national product. That’s why I think that the case of Spain is a good example to evoke oil problem. Furthermore, this choose becomes interresting when it enables us to make a comparaison between Spain and other countries such as France and England.
Contraty to Spain, French and English governments have not presented a plan yet. Nevertheless, in England, some measures have been set up. For instance, we can mention the project entitled “Transition Towns”. The aim of this project is to equip communities for the dual challenges of climate change and peak oil. Thus, several work groups have been created in Totnes, an english city. They have to find means to enable to the city to live without oil whitin 20 years. In France, there are also thumbnail measures. For example, we can see on french motorways sentences such as “Moins vite, moins cher” that is “less quickly, less expensive” which aim at incite us to reduce our speed.
Next, we can notice that beyond the economic problem, oil means many other problems. This article indirectly incites us to talk about another problem when it evokes, for example, the project with free energy-saving light bulbs. It is the pollution. Oil combustion poses serious environnement problems because it throws out big quantity of harmful products for the ecosystem and planet and thus absorption planet capacities seems to be exceeded since 1990. This provokes many upsets and in particular global warming. And beyond pecuniary economy, the project with free energy-saving light bulbs would enable a decreasing of CO2 rejection. 2 millions tons wouldn’t be rejected which is not inconsiderable for environment.
We can also talk about another problem : nowaydays, we use more oil than planet is able to produce. According to economists, reserves’ depletion is an issue which threatens us.
To conclude, this article shows us that, that we want it or not, we will constrained to rapidly solve oil problems. All governments are not equally implicated in this search of solutions. In my opinion, Spain government’s implication in order to reduce oil consumption in the country is a good thing. The measures are certainly constraining but they are necessary and so, they are warrantable. And we can notice that they are not the cruellest. Actually, we could imagine a government which would decide to further increase, for example, the tax of oil products and the cost of electricity in order to force people to reduce their consumption. Spanishs who contest the plan should to realize that things are not just fine as they are, that to take measures is a necessity and that this plan in particular is not necessarly the worst.