aide correction anglais

Bonsoir, jeudi je passe un oral d'anglais, pour cela j'ai dû rédiger un rapport, mais je suis pas très forte anglais, pouvez essayer de le corriger, merci


General Information
I make my training period in « Allevard Rejna Autosuspension ».
This company is situated in Douai, in the Nord Pas de Calais.
My training period is took place in two parts:
The first is accomplished that twenty eight of May to seven of July two thousand and seven. This one is aimed to do the firm to discover.
The second is accomplished that seventy to twenty eight of September two thousand and seven. I had for mission to study the machine’s functioning.
Allevard is a manufacturer to stabilizers. This production is destined in the big cars manufacturers Europeans.
The company is leader in Europe and second in the world on the manufacture to stabilizers.
The stabilizers enable to avoid at the car to turn around in a turning.
Indeed, the stabilizers support the outsides’ wheels press on the ground.
This product is installing on cars’ trains.

The training period
I am affected in maintain service, my work consisted to repair or maintain the machines.
During this training period, I had opportunity to teamwork, however, I was only an observer at the beginning. Later, My mentor myself entrusted to bigger responsibilities.
In the companies as Allevard, the teamwork is vital, because the tasks are very important for to be entrusted at the only one person.

The balance sheet
Thanks to the training period, I am acquired a knowledge considerable and I discovered smartness which makes easier the work. I had the opportunity to put into practice my knowledge theoretical.
This experience allowed me to deepen the practice which I hadn’t at the school.
It allowed me equally to discover the work’s world but too I had luck to approach the responsibility’s notion.
Even if I had appreciated this training period, I would like to continue my studies for to acquire a better place because the place that I occupied wasn’t always very easy.

My projects
I plan to go on my studies in the robotic or in the plastics processing industry.
I would like to work in a design office around a dozen or about fifteen years for to acquire my own experience and to become a teacher for to transmit my knowledge at the students.

Donc après une lecure rapide et en ayant un niveau moyen en anglais (donc vérifie ce que je vais dire quand même):
-I made my training [je suis pas sur que make soit le meilleur verbes ici]
-My training period had take place [bon pour le temps je pense pas avoir raison mais je trouve que "is took place" sonne bizarre]
-The first [je pense pas qu'il y ai besoin de The devan first]
-the 28th (twenty eighth) to the 7th (seventh)
-re-pareil pour la date
-is destined to
-i was affected [je suis pas sur, sasn que le tiens est bon il faudrait vérifier]
-i have the opportunity to practice teamwork [pas sur non plus]
-my mentor myself entrusted [... c'est himself = lui-même]
-the [tu peux enlever the] tasks are very important for to be entrusted [... soit c'est for soit c'est to ... là je pencherais plus pour to be qui sonne mieux je trouve] at the only one person [cette partie je la changerais par] to only one person / to an only person
-i am acquired => i have acquired
-a knowledge considerable => a considerable knowledge ... ou tu peux mettre such knowledge [= tellement de ]
-and i discoverd smartness [je pense pas que intellignece soit un bon terme ... c'est plus de competence dont il serait question ici donc soit tu connait avec knowledge sans le répéter] => I have acquired a considerable knowledge which makes easier work [le the devant work est inutile je pense]
-my knowledge theoretical => my theorical's knowledge
-wich i hadn't at school [il ne faut pas the school quoi moi je trouve que ça fait trop lourd sinon]
-equally [a un sens d'égalité mais mathématique je crois je pense ici que also est plus approprié] => it also allowed me
-continue my studies for to acquire [enléve le for]
-a better place because the place that I occupied [ici place n'est pas le bon mot car a un sens de lieu ... utilise un mot pour désigner les responsabilitées ou quelque chose dans le genre]
-I would like to work in a design office around =>[change] around [par] since
-for to acquire [enleve le for ]
-for to transmit [enleve le for et je pense que mettre share à la place de transmit serait mieux dans la phrase ... partager les connaissance fait plus classe je trouve ]


Donc voilà, après je ne suis ni anglais ni prof d'anglais donc la plupart des choses que j'ai marqué ne doivent pas être totalement fausses mais bon essaye de vérifier quand même si tu peux
voilà bon courage