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Corrrection faute en anglais :s

Dernière réponse : dans Etudes - Travail

Bonjour,

Voilà j'ai fait un devoir en anglais.
Mais il doit surement avoir beaucoup de faute :s
Quelqu'un pourrait m'aider à retirer toute les fautes s'il vous plaît ?

Voici le texte :

Citation :
Today, the world is based on consumption. We must buy for live but must we buy for exist?
As a first step, we will explain the importance of buying into society.
In a second step, we will see the negative consequences of the purchase on the personality.


People consume more and more, it's the development of consumer society. Why people buy ? People buy for live, for comfort, but also to make like everyone else. People are afraid of difference. How can a man who not consume nothing, could fit into today's society ? So to integrate into society, we must consume.
Nowadays, we do not judge people about their personality, but on their property material. Someone who has a car will be better consider that someone who does not have a car. So to be of importance in society, we must buy.
To have a place in society, one should consume. But we never think the wrong side of consumption.

People buy also for look like other person. For exemple, a young person who is fan a singer, will do all for look like her. But too likeness to the other, are not we a pale copy of the other? The influence of society that impels us to buy prevents us from being ourselves.
The consumer society creates a dependency to shops. If trade disappears, many people not would be how to live.


To exist in society, People must consume. But what we buy change our personality for other people. It may then be asked : How are considered the people who subsist at their own needs without consuming ?


Merci d'avance pour votre aide !!

Amicalement CooLMaN :) 

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Today, the world is based on consumption. We must buy to live but must we buy to exist? As a first step, we will explain the importance of buying in the society.
In a second step, we will see the negative consequences of the purchase on the personality. (???)


People consume more and more, it's the development of consumer society. Why does people buy ? People buy to live, for the comfort, but also to do like everyone. People are afraid of difference. How can a man who doesn't consume nothing, could fit into nowadays society ? As a consequence, to integrate in the society, we are obliged to consume.
Nowadays, we do not judge people about their personality, but on their material property. Someone who has a car will be better considered that someone who doesn't have a car. So to have importance in society, we have to buy.
But we never think about the wrong side of consumption.

People buy also to look like other people. For example, a young person who is fan of a singer, will all do to look like him/her. But too likeness to the other, aren't we a pale copy of the others? The influence of society that impells us to buy, prevents us from being ourselves.
The consumer society creates a dependency from shops. If trade disappears, many people not would be how to live.


To survive in society, People is compelled to consume. But what we buy change can change our personality for the others. We can now ask ourselves : How do people who subsist to their own needs without consuming, are considered as ?


Remarques: C'est quoi cette tendance à traduire mots pour mots? Tu as beaucoup de difficultés... notamment avec la différence entre "to" et "for", pourtant c'est basique! Apprends aussi à formuler tes questions, et à varier ton vocabulaire...

Quel niveau?

;) 

"In a second step, we will see the negative consequences of the purchase on the personality"

Je voulais ici dire : Dans une seconde partie, nous verrons les conséquences négatives de l'achat sur la personnalité.

C'est mal dit ?

( Le sujet étant : J'achète donc je suis. )

Yugurten a dit :
LOL je n'ai que 17 ans et je vais passer mon BAC...
Oui mais tu viens d'où???
Puisque tu as dit "je n'ai passé qu'un an en France"...
Bah j'ai vecu a San Francisco, NYC, Athene, Dubai, Singapour dernierement! Et la je suis sur Lille :) 

CooLMaN974 a dit :
"In a second step, we will see the negative consequences of the purchase on the personality"

Je voulais ici dire : Dans une seconde partie, nous verrons les conséquences négatives de l'achat sur la personnalité.

C'est mal dit ?

( Le sujet étant : J'achète donc je suis. )
As a second step, i will explain the negatives points of personnal purchasing.

Je comprends deja pas top la phrase en francais :/ 
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