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Salut j'ai un problème en anglais, je voudrais corriger l'orthographe,grammaire et ponctuation pourriez vous m'aider merci


The television was created in 1..... to it.... by...... in black and white it was reserved to the no one first rich, it is since some
years in all firm. The television is considered like an indispensable technology.
On the one hand like a tool of entertainment for the whole family and another as a tool
of training for the children.

Indeed, with the Television, the all small learn some sounds, of the words... They develop
their sense as monitoring and the view.
Besides, the television also serves has inform the adults, of the events in the world grace,
to the newspapers by examples.

However, the television doesn't have that of the positive points.
According to several studies, the television is synonymous of violence and transmits it to the young. The parents don't follow
some small rules as the signals that announce age permitted. Besides the children make more
attention to the television that their studies have.


Consequently, the television can have negative points as positives, all depends of the way
of which one uses it. The parents must look after the program of their children.


Voilà ce que je voulais dire en français

La télévision a été crée en 1..... au .... par ..... .D'abord en noir et blanc elle était réservé au personne riche ,elle est depuis quelques
années dans tous les maison. La télévision est considéré comme une technologie indispensable.
D'une part comme un outil de divertissement pour toute la famille et d'une autre comme un outil
d'apprentissage pour les enfants.

En effet, avec la Télévision, les tous petits apprennent des sons ,des mots ... Ils développent
leur sens tels que l'écoute et la vue .
De plus, la télévision sert également a informer les adultes, des événements dans le monde grâce
aux journaux par exemples .

Cependant, la télévision n'a pas que des points positifs.
Selon plusieurs études, la télévision est synonyme de violence et la transmet aux jeunes. Les parents ne suivent pas
quelques petites règles tel que les signaux qui annonce l'âge permis. De plus les enfants font plus
attention à la télévision qu'a leurs études .


En conséquence , la télévision peut avoir des points négatifs comme des positifs, tout dépend de la façon
dont on l'utilises. Les parents doivent veiller au programme de leurs enfants .



Profil MP Modifier

Television was created in 1926 by the scottish John Baird. At the beginning in black and white, it was reserved to the richest. Nowadays everyone has at least one television set in their house. TV is considered as an essential technology. One the hand TV is a tool of entertainment and information for the family. On the other hand, it is a tool of learning for the children.

Indeed, with TV, the youngers can learn words, sounds.... They develop their senses as their view and listening (là j'ai pas trop compris où tu voulais en venir, euh avec la télé notre vue et note ouïe n'augmentent pas).
Moreover, TV can inform adults too, about world's events, thanks to documentaries, sports broadcasts, the weather forcast, for example (Je te rajoute du vocabulaire).

However, TV doesn't have only positive points. According to several studies, TV is synonymous of violence transmitted to children. Parents don't respect the warning about minimum ages allowed.

To conclude, TV has positive and negative points, but all depends of what you watch. In my opinion, parents should be more attentive of what children watch.

J'ai fait quelques modifs



Television was created in 1926 by the Scottish John Baird. At the beginning in black and white, it was reserved to the richest. Nowadays everyone has at least one television set in their house. TV is considered as an essential technology.

On the one hand TV is a tool of learning for the children, and a tool of entertainment and information for adult people.
On the other hand, it can be negative for the children.

Indeed, with TV, the youngers can learn a lot of things. They develop their critical sens and their knowledge.
Moreover, TV can inform adults too, about world's events, thanks to documentaries, sports broadcasts, the weather forcast, for example.

However, TV doesn't have only positive points. According to several studies, TV is synonymous of violence transmitted to children. Parents don't respect the warning about minimum ages allowed. Children trivalize violence and can be violent with the other children, in order to act as what they see in TV.

In a word, TV has positive and negative points, but all depends of what you watch. In my opinion, parents should be more attentive of what children watch.

Ce n'est pas grave, je ne recherche que ça, m'entraîner et aider en même temps

Merci, je corrige

On m'a donné une critque sur des phrases mais je sais pas comment remèdier sa : Indeed, with TV, the youngers can learn words, sounds (ce n'est pas la phrase qui est fausse, ce sont les idées ... les osns, ils les connaissent déjà, à la rigueur les mots).... They develop their senses as their view and listening. (same statement) (métaphore de la fenêtre ouverte sur le monde .... une idée en passant)
Moreover, TV can inform adults too, about world's events, thanks to documentaries, sports broadcasts, the weather forcast, for example.