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bonjour,
j'ai réalisé une lettre de motivation pour un stage de developpeur web,
je voudrai de l'aide pour la corriger. Pour le formalisme ça doit aller mais je ne suis pas trop sur de mon anglais. merci d'avance


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Dear Sir or Madam,

Provides access to the British Telecom portfolio for customers and partners, and offer a more compact website filled with the information that clients need at their fingertips : it is this services which are renowned your compagny. In development, you are has research to collaborators able to participate in the implementation and the developpment of a web site.
I am currently enrolled in the first year of a computer science Master’s Degree and acquired during this formation a first working experience, and I announce you my will to integrate your compagny. In fact, my knowledges in Visual Studio, HTML, Mysql, Oracle and my working methods learnt during my course correspond with your application. I am very much interested in developpment of website and I have developed my knowledge on the subject thanks to working experiences : creation of web site for a association and naval defence compagny. So, such experiences have given me the opportunity to build a general picture and perspective of this computer science field.

I believe that my previous experience with setting up and administering Windows Server/2000/2003, Linux, and hybrid networks will be of interest to you. In addition, I have vast knowledge and experience with networking and the Internet. I also have experience with Oracle Server and mySQL. I have programmed stand-alone applications in Visual Basic. I am very interested in working as a Web Designer, for I feel that my abilities and interests will help me to succeed. Your compagny is the type of organization where I am confident my skills and knowledge would be best suited.

Integrate your team, significate for me to complete my knowledge in computer science and more particulary in website design and develop. Therefore, I would like to ask you if there is an opportunity for me to do my three-month internship at the end of this year (May, June, July, August 2008). I look forward to the opportunity to discuss this position with you during the interview period., let me thank you for your time and consideration.


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salut
je pense deja que tu dvrais mettre madam avant sir. Mais en ce qui concerne l'orthographe je pense que je n'ai pas assez d'expérience pour t'aider !! desolé !

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Hi,
Pour commencer tu devrais laisser Sir avant Madam - Dear Sir/Madam est correcte. Apres pas - provides mais commencez la phrase comme ceci

Dear Sir/Madam,

Je peut corriger votre lettre n ( il y a beaucoup de fautes ) mais la premiere paragraph - je ne comprende pas pourquoi vous voulez commencer ainsi - expliquez moi

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