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Devoir Anglais, besoin d'aide texte

Dernière réponse : dans Etudes - Travail

Bonjour,
Voilà, je suis nul (trés nul...) en Anglais et je dois rendre un texte.
Je ne sais pas si il y a des fautes, c'est pour ça que je voudrais que quelqu'un puisse me le corriger.(c'est à rendre pour demain, Mardi 16 octobre)

Voilà le texte :

My best hollydays were two years ago. I went to the Reunion, small island of the Indian Ocean.
I visited the volcan of " La fournaise ".
My family and me walked a long time and, to arrive in top, we had taken photos and I had taken a volcan stone.
Then, we had left to the beach, my mother stayed on the beach with my father and I "nager" with my sister.
Then, I went to my grands-parents of St Denis.
My mother bought a lot of souvenirs.
Then, we had left for France because the school beginnig.
We stayed at the Reunion about one mounth.


Voilà, merci d'avance à celui qui me réponds.
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salut , je t'apporte quelques reponses meme si je peux pas te dire si tout est bon^^
dabord le mot vacances s'ecrit "holidays" , ensuite nager se dit swim et au passé ce sera swam!
souvenirs se dit memories
Je te propose d'autres phrases pour les idées de ton texte car certaines ne vont pas avec le contexte ..

Pour la phrase " my family and me...a volcan stone " : My family and me had walken during a long time and when we arrived in the top , we had taken a lot of photos and the volcan stone.
Pour la phrase : "Then I went to.." : Then we had gone to my grandparents's house in Saint Denis .
Pour la phrase: Then, we had left..":Then we came back to France because the school was going to begin

Enleve la derniere phrase et met plutot au debut que "I went to Reunion , a small island in the Indian Ocean , during one month"

Voila voila jespere t'avoir aidé , j'aime beaucoup l'anglais donc si je peux aidé ; )
Bye ^^

My best hollydays were two years ago. I went to the Reunion, small island of the Indian Ocean.

Un peu maladroit ... I've passed my best holidays, two years ago, in 'L'ile de la Reunion", a french island of the Indian Ocean.
Tu peux utiliser le passé have + pp vu que c'est un expérience .. et attention il faut utiliser ce temps si tu met ago --

I've visited the volcan of " La fournaise ".
Même chose c'est un expérience ... le temps composé serait plus approprié.

With my family, we walked for a long time to finally arrive to the top; there we had taken some photos and i've picked up a volcanic rocks (plus approprié ici ^^).

Then, we had gone to the beach. My parents prefered stay on the beach while i was swimming with my sister.

After, I had paid a visit to my grands-parents, who live in St Denis.
My mother bought a lot of souvenirs.
We stayed at the Reunion about one mounth.
Finally, we had to come back to France because of the school beginnig.

Voila grossomodo ^^
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