correctiuon d'un texte en anglais

We are finally on the car park of a supermarket. We wait all in the bus which Mrs Coin calls us to join our respective families. I criticized the appearance of some parents a lot! I said Oh look at the big person there low, he saw you as he is old, Oh no, he smokes! And I was afraid of being with three of them, because they did not inspire me. I began to be made films. I wanted not young person's family. More and more I felt my heart beating, because the minutes which passed by seemed an eternity, and as accidentally, I and Laure will ße the last ones to leave with her family. It is the head of family who came late to look for us: M Hubbard. I was satisfied because he appears young person, it seemed nice, and cool. He had difficulty in pronouncing Laure's first name and mine he did not pronounce it. In the car he put the music in strong volume. We arrive finally home, they had a beautiful house. We enter. Mrs Hubbard we hello, then three children. I was satisfied to see my family and that there are children there, until that I learn that the biggest of the girls was going to sleep with Laure and me in the same room.

Pouvez vous me corrigez svp?merci d'avance

merci quand même c'est super gentil! si quelqu'un peut me corriger n'hésitez pas!

personne ne peut me répondre?

We are finally in the car park of a supermarket. We all waited in the bus, when Mrs Coin calls us to join our respective families.
I criticized the appearance of some parents a lot!
“ I said Oh look at the big person there, he saw you as he is old,” pas compris? Oh no, he smokes!” And I was afraid of being with three of them, because they did not inspire me.
I started to make my films .

I did not want a young person's family. More and more I felt my heart beating,, because the minutes which passed by seemed an eternity.

Laure and me will be the last ones to leave with our family. It was the head of the family who came late to look for us: M Hubbard. I was satisfied because he seems to be a young person; nice, and cool. He had difficulty in pronouncing Laure's first name and he did not pronounce my first name. In the car he turned up the music. We finally arrived home. They had a beautiful house. We entered in the house. Mrs Hubbard was waiting to say to us hello , before three children arrived . I was satisfied to see my family and that there are children there. Then I learned that the oldest girl gone to sleep with Laure and me in the same room.

Ma meilleure conjecture. Mon francias est mereded

@banane00712: je crois que je t'avais répondu!

Mais pas grave

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