verification anglais

Voilà j'ai ecrit un texte en anglais et j'aimerais m'assuere que tout est coherent:

This story began in an ordinary day, I toke my car to go job, when I noticed that there were a lot of hold ups in the motor way. I quietly stayed in my car waiting that it was clear. It was really hot and in my car it was unbearable. So I decided to go out and go to eat, a Mac do was at 4 miles, it was very far away without my car, I left my car in the motorway. I came to the time to order a Mac morning, but I had to form the queue. When I got ready to order a Mac morning, the girl had said me: I am sorry but after 12:00 p.m. the Mac morning is finished, so I decide to go back at my car, when my phone rang, it’s was the pound, they embarked my car in their depository, and bad luck! My phone switched off. So I had to go back in my home on foot and I had to walk 6 miles. It was a really bad day for me.

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This story began on an ordinary day, I took my car to go to my job, when I noticed that there was a big hold up in the motor way. I quietly stayed in my car waiting for it to clear. It was really hot and in my car it was unbearable. So I decided to go out and go to eat, a Mac do was 4 miles away. It was very far away without my car so I left my car in the motorway. I came to order a Mac morning, but I had to wait in the queue. When I got ready to order a Mac morning, the girl had said to me “I am sorry but after 12:00 p.m. the Mac morning is finished”. So I decide to go back at my car. My phone rang, it was the pound, they impounded my car in their depository. Bad luck! My phone switched off. So I had to go back to my home on foot and I had to walk 6 miles. It was a really bad day for me.

… toke, means to inhale marijuana.