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Besoin d'aide en Anglais pour la correction d'un texte,

Dernière réponse : dans Etudes - Travail

Bonjour,
Voila en faite j'ai un "Creative writting" a rendre en anglais , j'ai rédigé mon texte, j'ai essayer de faire le moin de faute d'ortographe, ect... mais je suis loin d'être excellent dans cette matière :lol: 
J'ai peur que mon texte ne veuille tout simplement rien dire, et surtout , je suis trés mauvais en grammaire anglaise, Pouvez vous m'aider en corrigant mon texte svp ? :ange: 
Voici mon texte :

Saturday 11th, July

My first morning in fort Sedgewick, I was arrived to this place the day before.
I woke up at 8.00 am to explore the surroundings and to seek any clue which can help me to understand the disappearance of the soldiers. After three hours of walk I saw only two rabbits and a gray animal as tall as a dog with far, perhaps a wolf, finally nothing of interesting for my research, but I don't despair.
I went back to the fort in the neighborhoods of midday to lunch, I don't know how much time I will stay here, so I save the provisions. After eat this little meal, I allowed myself to take a break of few minutes and then I set out again.
My second exploration was practically useless,I saw no Indians, nor of signs of the gray animal, the only thing new I saw was a dark cave, I did not inspect it yet.
Now, I'm just of return , and I'm asking me many questions : What had happened here? Are the soldiers still alive? Where are the Indians?
I'm alone but that don't matter me because I'm a loner, but I admit that I feel a little bit scared of being only one in this fort whereas I'm on the frontier.
Everything gets confused in my thoughts, so I go to bed.


Merci... je compte sur vous :) 

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My first morning in fort Sedgewick, I arrived in this place yesterday.
I woke up at 8.00 am to explore the surroundings and to seek any clue which could help me to understand the disappearance of the soldiers. I walked three hours after his I just saw two rabbits and a strange gray animal as tall as a dog with far, perhaps a wolf, actully I found nothing interesting for my research, but I didn't despair.
I went back to the fort in the neighborhoods of midday to lunch, I wasn't know how much time I will stay here, so I saved some provisions. After i have eaten this little meal, I allowed myself to take few minutes rest and then I continued my research.
My second exploration was practically useless.There was no indians no animal I saw a dark cave,I was surprised because I did not inspect it yet.
Then i was coming back,I was asking meself many questions : What had happened here? Were the soldiers still alive? Where were the Indians?
I was alone but that didn't matter me because I was a loner, but I admited that I felt a little bit scared of being only one in this fort whereas I went on the frontier.
I got confused in my thoughts, so I went to bed.


J'èspére que c mieux j 'ai fais quelques changements mais just un petit conseille soit tu mes ton texte au passé simple et be+ing soit au présent fais pas un mélange des deux.
voila

Merci beaucoup meki , mais en faite , ( j'aurai du mieu m'expliquer au départ) , il s'agit d'un texte présenté sous la forme d'un journal de bord, il y a donc certaine partie qui doivent être au présent , car le narrateur parle de la situation du moment
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