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Summary:

Cannabis and other drugs are a real problem in Britain and all around the world. A report shows that there are more and more drug addicts today.
The most alarming thing is that hard drugs like heroin and crack, which are very dangerous drugs, and used by nearly an half of addicts.
It has been noticed that people, and especially children, who couldn’t be able to afford to buy their dose of drugs, began to steal. Even worse, some could kill. For example, a 15 years old boy murdered one of his brothers with a knife because he had smoked some joints.
Even if drug seizures have risen, officials can’t stop the main dealers and traffickers.
The downgrading of cannabis from class B category to class C category was a very bad decision. But children should interpret this in their way and begin to smoke.
The drug market in cannabis, ecstasy, crack and heroin is a market which offers chances for young adolescents to earn money easily. You should know that drug market brings in a lot of money, it’s comparable to a third of the tobacco market.
Even if the drug use is stable, there will always have addicts.


Comment:

I think that Cannabis and all other drugs are useless. Nobody should begin to some smoke joints just because it seems funny. Consequences are horrible and it’ difficult to stop smoking.
A lot of children begin to smoke joints at school with friends who have smoked for ages. They use drugs because they want to show that they are strong. But I think that they are just stupid because a real friend would never suggest you a joint.
I don’t think that legalization of “soft” drugs, like in Holland, is great. It incites adolescents to try them when they are 18 years old.
The drug market is a solution for children, adolescents and adults who need money. They become dealers then.
An other problem with drugs is that it’s dangerous for the health. For example a smoker of joints has 55 % more chances to have a lung cancer.
Children should be aware about drugs’ risks. They should be informed when they’re young at schools. They must know that drugs bring nothing good.
I know that it’s hard to stop this drug market because you can’t control your children all the time but they must be warned.