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Dernière réponse : dans Etudes - Travail

Je voudrais svoir si mon texte convient, la question posé est :
Pourquoi est-ce important de pratiquer régulièrement du sport ?
J'ai répondu :
The practice of a sport makes it possible to burn calories and so to prevent obesity, it facilitates the evacuation of the nervous tension accumulated in the course of the day and allows the discovery of the body and its limits. The first advantage is the pleasure! For me, it is the most important thing. About health, the benefit of the sport activity are very much. What is sure, it is that the physical activity improves the quality of life. Moreover, the sport has a mentally role : it reinforces the regard of oneself, allows integration in the social place and prevents some problems of insulation. To practise physical activities is to introduce pleasure into its life, but especially to optimize its potential energy and to increase its capital health.

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Practise sports burn calories and so prevent obesity, it facilitates the evacuation of the nervous tension accumulated in the course of the day and allows the discovery of the body and its limits. The first advantage is the pleasure! For me, it is the most important thing. About health, there are so much benefits. What is sure, it is that the physical activity improves the life's quality. Moreover, the sport has a mentally role : it reinforces the regard of oneself, allows integration in the social place and prevents some problems of insulation.
When a physical activity is practise, it introduce pleasure into the life, but it also optimize the energy's potential and to finish, it increase the health's capital


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