Aide pr correction lettre de motiv en anglais pr entrée dans 1 école

Bonjour !

J'ai écris une lettre de motivation pour entrée dans une école, j'aimerais seulement savoir si quelqu'un pourrait corriger mon mail s'il y a des fautes, ou peut-être corriger le style, si certaines choses sont incorrectement dites. Merci beaucoup de votre aide !!


Dear Madam/Sir,

Your school offers the opportunity of following an anglophone training open to foreigners and delivering a diploma recognized by the State. Carrying out this one in your school would materialize my personal plan for the future.

Wealth (Blossomed out ?) from one year of enriching experience in Asia (le fait est que je ne viens pas de revenir ("returning from..." ) cela date déjà de 7 ans), I passed my bachelor’s degree in Japanese in 2006. Currently doing my 1st year of Master, I am completing my international cultural and economic knowledge and wish to finalize my course by a program specialized in the fields of fashion.

Having a passion for relationship, languages and art, I have developed, through my experiences, abilities for adaptation and observation; major assets to succeed in a trade which evolves permanently in a context of global exchanges.

To become an actor of today’s world and live a true passion, here is my professional and personal challenges. You will find my full application form herewith. Looking forward to our future interview, I remain, Madam/Sir, yours truly.