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I think that keep souvenir it is very important as we grow of older because a souvenir can represent a person or a moment of my life. But it exists many souvenirs as photo, clothes...
For examle , I have keep a souvenir of my ex , it is a ring ! When arrive the moment , i think the beautiful moment and i was in tears. I know that this ring it a treasure for meand it is important in my eyes. The life is very short and keep souvenir it futermore more important because evry moment is a godd while and every souvenir believes in the heard. But when we keep a souvenir of a personn, we can show that we have a sentiment or we take after this personn! And wen we were very older, it is important to keep souvenir because we can rememored our childhood and to tell about our children notre life and describe him ! It is always great moment because every moment of my life is a a sort of diamant or a sort of tresor

But I think that is good to keep souvenir but people must not fasten to this object by risk to live in the past and not in the future. Most probably think of the past and they depress because thier dream is to return in the past but it is impossible


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I think that to keep souvenir it is very important as we grow up because a souvenir can represent a person or a moment of my life. But it exists many souvenirs as photo, clothes...
For example , I have kept a souvenir of my ex , it is a ring ! When arrive the moment , i think of the beautiful moment and i was in tears. I know that this ring it a treasure for me and it is important in my eyes. The life is very short and to keep souvenir it futermore more important because every moment is a godd while and every souvenir believes in the heart. But when we keep a souvenir of a personn, we can show that we have a sentiment or we take after this personn! And wen we are very older, it is important to keep souvenir because we can remember our childhood and tell our children our life and describe it ! It is always a great moment because every moment of my life is a
sort of diamant or a sort of tresor

But I think that it is good to keep souvenir but people must not fasten to this object by risking to live in the past and not in the future. Most probably think of the past and they depress because their dream is to return in the past but it is impossible

Voilà ce que je pense être des erreurs ; il y a aussi un probleme de temps avec 'When arrive the moment... in tears', mais comme je ne comprends pas exactement ce que tu veux dire...

I think that keeping souvenirs as we grow up is very important. in fact, a souvenir can represent a person or a moment IN my life. but it exists many kind of souvenirs as photos, clothes,...
for exemple, i have kept a souvenir if my last (or ex-boyfriend), it WAS a ring. When the moment arrives , i think of the beautiful moments we had and i cry (etre en larmes n'existe pas en anglais). I know that this ring is a treasure for me so it means a lot to me. Life is very short and keeping souvenirs is futermore more important because every moment is good (le reste est incomprehensible). But when we keep a souvenir of a person, we can show that we have feelings or we take after this person! And when we get older, it is important to keep souvenirs because we can remember our childhood and tell our children how our life was!
For me, it is always a great moment because every moment of my life is a
sort of diamant or a sort of treasure

I think that it is good to keep souvenir but people must not fasten to this object by risking to live in the past. this way to thnk make them depress because they'll dream to return in the past and it is impossible.