Correction SVP
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Bjr, j'ai selectionné quelques phrases de ma synthèse d'angalais, car je ne suis pas sûre qu'elles soient correctes. Merci de me corriger si c'est nécessaire!!
The opium is a drug which makes people in a trance. People can be addicted to football as a drug, and this sport gives dream to the supporters.
Football can as a drug make addicted. The man wants to have all things which reminder his favourite team. They have not a lot of savings because they are often working -class people.
When people are in stadium, they forget their own problems, because football gives dream to the supporters.
Football can be considerate as a drug , as opium. It is a good way to limit violence and agressiveness in towns, because stadiums concentrate violence.
The opium is a drug which makes people in a trance. People can be addicted to football as a drug, and this sport gives dream to the supporters.
Football can as a drug make addicted. The man wants to have all things which reminder his favourite team. They have not a lot of savings because they are often working -class people.
When people are in stadium, they forget their own problems, because football gives dream to the supporters.
Football can be considerate as a drug , as opium. It is a good way to limit violence and agressiveness in towns, because stadiums concentrate violence.
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Opium is a drug that makes people rave. Some can be addicted to football and this sport makes the supporters dream. Football can produce addiction just as a drug. The supporter wants to have all the things which reminds him of his favorite team. They haven't got a lot of savings because they often are working-class people. (là par contre on ne sait pas qui est le they, les supporters? les gens qui se droguent? il faudrait préciser le they en début de phrase)
When people are at the stadium they forget their own problems because foorball makes them dream.
Football can be considered as a drug just as opium. It's a good way to reduce violence and agressiveness beacause stadiums concentrate violence.
J'ai essayé de rester très proche du texte. Franchement c'est pas très bon, tu te répètes beaucoup et la construction des phrases est assez basique, tu ne surprends pas, c'est limite un langage de gamin de 10ans... fin à ta place je ferais des modifications ^^
When people are at the stadium they forget their own problems because foorball makes them dream.
Football can be considered as a drug just as opium. It's a good way to reduce violence and agressiveness beacause stadiums concentrate violence.
J'ai essayé de rester très proche du texte. Franchement c'est pas très bon, tu te répètes beaucoup et la construction des phrases est assez basique, tu ne surprends pas, c'est limite un langage de gamin de 10ans... fin à ta place je ferais des modifications ^^
SI vous avez le temps, j'ai selectionné d'autres phrases dont je ne suis pas sûr de la formulation...Elles sont toujours aussi "dignes d'un enfant de 10 ans"...Merci![:D]( ":D")
This sport is very famous in the world. We can focus on the consequences for people of this sport.
During a match, men and women are so exciting that they don't think about their own difficulties like unemployment, money problems anymore.
When people are interesting in life of football players, they admire them, and they try to identify with them , to have the same haircut, or the same tatoo for exemple.
Some people are addicted to it, and makes them euphoric.
This sport is very famous in the world. We can focus on the consequences for people of this sport.
During a match, men and women are so exciting that they don't think about their own difficulties like unemployment, money problems anymore.
When people are interesting in life of football players, they admire them, and they try to identify with them , to have the same haircut, or the same tatoo for exemple.
Some people are addicted to it, and makes them euphoric.
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