dissert anglais, qu'est ce que vous en pensez ?

voici le sujet : would you be ready to go and live in a faraway country if it mean getting a better life ?

et voici ma réponse :-?

i would be ready to go and live in a faraway country because i want to discover another cultures and build up my personnality and i like to travel in all countrys but the choice to settle an another country is then difficult because we can to have a better life in america with a liberal economy or in indian village in amazonia, to be able start afresh a new life is very exiting but to change his life, his culture and his language ca be difficult because wa can feel excluted, it is difficult to addapt his life an a another culture and way of life, i would not like emigrate to china because the people is too much many and i would not like to feel me small in the medium of the foule or emmigrate to finlande because the landscape is monotonous and the climate is cold. earn money is not important for me i would like just be happy in another country without friends and family, i search the tranquility.
to conclude , if i can go and live in another country, i jump at the opportunity

merci pour votre aide ;-)

Les idées sont bonnes, mais il y a quelques erreur d'anglais ;-) je peux peut etre t'aider a en corriger quelques unes, mais je ne suis pas un expert.


voici le sujet : would you be ready to go and live in a faraway country if it mean getting a better life ?

et voici ma réponse :-?

I would be ready to go and live in a faraway country because i want to discover another culture and build up my personnality. I would also like to visit a lot of countries but the choice to settle in another country is difficult because we might have a better life in America with a liberal economy or in indian village in amazonia and to be able to start afresh new life is very exiting but to change our life, our culture and our own language could be difficult because we might feel excluted. It is difficult to adapt ourselves with another culture and way of life. i would not like to immigrate to china because there are too many peoples and i would not like to feel "small" in the middle of the crowd. I also wouldn't like to live in Finlande because the landscape is monotonous and the climate is cold. Earning money is not the most important to me, I would just like to feel happy in another country with my friends and my familly, I'm looking for the calmness.
To conclude , (if i can go and live in another country, i jump at the opportunity) If I had the opportunity to live in a forain country, I would "seize the day". (ca ve ut dire, que si tu avais l'opportunité de vivre dans un pays étranger "littéralement" tu cueillerais le jour, tu saisirais l'opportunité ;-)


J'espère avoir pu t'aider un peu, demandes confirmation avant de tout recopier et vérifie bien que je n'ai pas fait de contresens. J'ai eu un peu de mal a comprendre ce que tu voulais dire parfois.
Il doit rester des erreurs, mais mon anglais n'est pas assez bon pour tout corriger.

Bye
Thomas

I think I would be ready to go and live in a faraway country. On one hand, because I would discover another culture and it would help with the building up of my personnality. I would also like to visit lots of countries but, on the other hand, the choice to settle in another country is difficult to make. We might have a better life in America, with a liberal economy or in an indian village in amazonia. To be able to start a fresh new life is very exciting but to change our life, our culture and our own language could be difficult because we might feel excluded. It is difficult to adapt ourselves with another culture and way of life. I would not like to immigrate to China because there is too much people there, and I would not like to feel like drowned in the middle of the crowd. I also wouldn't like to live in Finland because the landscape is monotonous and the climate is cold. Earning money is not the most important to me, I would just like to feel happy in another country with my friends and my familly, I'm looking for serenity.
To conclude, I would say that if I had the opportunity to live in a foreign country, I think I would seize the day.



j'ai fait ce que j'ai pu.. ça devrait aller, y'a -largement- moins de fautes d'orthographe.. ;-)
en espérant qu'il ne soit pas trop tard... :-?