anglais, correction
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voila j'avais une contraction croisée à faire en anglais. Je ne dois pas dépasser 143 mots.
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voila mon résumé :
The tobacco harms health seriously. A lot of people estimates that to smoke between one and four cigarettes per day is practically nothing. They think to be protected by the hazards from the tobacco. A Norwegian investigation revealed that to smoke, even very little, increases the risk to die of heart disease and lung cancer.
This study was undertaken on volunteers, who were followed regularly. On the one hand, according to the investigation, the number of deaths per heart attack and lung cancer increase proportionally with the level of consumption. In other, these statistics show that the effects of the tobacco on health are the same ones for a "small smoker" and a "large smoker", especially for the 40 year old people.
this study, which began in the Seventies, reveal that there was little evolution in the consumption of tobacco at these volunteers. Therefore, vis-a-vis with this investigation, it is necessary that the governments adopt strict measures because the health of each one is concerned.
merci d'avance
pourriez vous me corriger les fautes, s'il vous plait ?
voila mon résumé :
The tobacco harms health seriously. A lot of people estimates that to smoke between one and four cigarettes per day is practically nothing. They think to be protected by the hazards from the tobacco. A Norwegian investigation revealed that to smoke, even very little, increases the risk to die of heart disease and lung cancer.
This study was undertaken on volunteers, who were followed regularly. On the one hand, according to the investigation, the number of deaths per heart attack and lung cancer increase proportionally with the level of consumption. In other, these statistics show that the effects of the tobacco on health are the same ones for a "small smoker" and a "large smoker", especially for the 40 year old people.
this study, which began in the Seventies, reveal that there was little evolution in the consumption of tobacco at these volunteers. Therefore, vis-a-vis with this investigation, it is necessary that the governments adopt strict measures because the health of each one is concerned.
merci d'avance
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between one and four cigarettes a day et non pas 'per day'
'estimates that',' revealed that'... en général les profs aiment pas les 'that' parce que c'est pas trop correct pense aux gérondif (-ing) ou aux propositions infinitives ^^
They think they are protected au lieu de 'they think to be protected '
Pour le reste je renonce, je comprends pas tout ^^ Merci le traducteur sur internet ou c'est toi qui l'a fait? ;-)
'estimates that',' revealed that'... en général les profs aiment pas les 'that' parce que c'est pas trop correct pense aux gérondif (-ing) ou aux propositions infinitives ^^
They think they are protected au lieu de 'they think to be protected '
Pour le reste je renonce, je comprends pas tout ^^ Merci le traducteur sur internet ou c'est toi qui l'a fait? ;-)
"hazards" ne s'utilise presque jamais, vaut mieux dire "chance"
a norvegian investigation HAS revealed (pas de date->pst perfect) that smokING
this study-> that (tu evoques qqch dont tu as déjà parlé)
to follow s'utilise dans ce sens? j'en doute
the number of death....increaseS
that study revealED
it necessary that the gov. SHOULD adopt (point de vue->should)
vis-a-vis with this investigation ??? i dont understant what you mean!^^
a norvegian investigation HAS revealed (pas de date->pst perfect) that smokING
this study-> that (tu evoques qqch dont tu as déjà parlé)
to follow s'utilise dans ce sens? j'en doute
the number of death....increaseS
that study revealED
it necessary that the gov. SHOULD adopt (point de vue->should)
vis-a-vis with this investigation ??? i dont understant what you mean!^^
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