Correction en Anglais.

Bonjours, je suis nouveau et l'on ma dit de venir ici pour que quelqu'un puisse me corrigé (si il y a des fautes evidament) ceci :

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Since our last summer holiday, It arrived to me some funnies and exciting unforgettable experiments.
At first, I met a woman called Sarah. It was at the aeroport of London. I found It charming and we fell in love at first sight. It was the great love but we had an argument what caused our breaking couple. It’s a pity because sarah was a person who was funny, attractive, generous and faithful.
In the second place, to forget Sarah, I had decided to occupy myself by making some sports. I thus made bungee jumping, It was incredible . I had experienced a rush of scared adrenalin. It was very exciting ! After that, I had made jump in parachute but it wasn’t funny. To finish, I have made scuba diving, It’s a sport which asked to you much energy but It was superb !
In my opinion, in these three extrem sports the less exciting was the jump in parachute and more it wasn’t funny ! I think too the scuba diving was much more attracive than the bungee jumping.
Thanks to all these sports I succeded in thinking less of Sarah.

Voilà, j'espere qu'un ame charitable pouras m'aider ;-)

D'avance un grand merci !

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J'oubliais de preciser que logiquement le vocabulaire doit etre bon mais que c'est plus mon utilisation des temps qui m'inquiette :-)

Merci !

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Personne :-( ?

(desolé mais c'est que c'est assez pressant ;-))

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Since our last summer holiday, it has happened to me some unforgettable funnies and exciting experiments.

First, I met a woman called Sarah at the airport of London. I found her charming and we felt in love immediately. It was the best love but we had an argument which caused our break. It’s a pity because sarah was a funny, attractive, generous and faithful person.

Next, to forget Sarah, I decided to amuse myself by playing sports. So, I made bungee jumping, it was incredible . I experienced a rush of scared adrenalin. It was very exciting ! After that, I made jump in parachute but it wasn’t funny. To finish, I made scuba diving. It’s a sport which asks for much energy, but it was superb !

In my opinion, in these three extreme sports the less exciting was the jump in parachute and more it wasn’t funny ! I think so that the scuba diving was much more attracive than the bungee jumping.

Thanks to all these sports, I have succeeded in thinking less of Sarah.

Voilà juste une correction que je te propose, je ne suis pas expert en anglais mais comme personne ne t'a répondu, j'espère que ça t'aidera.

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j'aurait mit pareil que toi husker mais je sais pas quand mettre preterit ou present perfect donc jsuis pa tro calé

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le present de perfect, c generalmen qd on fé un bilan, dc qd il y a un lien avec le present
me preterit c tt les otre, actions courtes passées ss lien avec le present donc

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Depuis quand tu parles Anglais quand t'es pas bourré mon cher Husker??? En tout cas tu fais des progrès...J'aurais mis la meme chose ou a peu près jorais mis parachute jump...
Au niveau des temps ca me parait pa mal et au nivo de la construction aussi

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selleck a écrit :
Depuis quand tu parles Anglais quand t'es pas bourré mon cher Husker??? En tout cas tu fais des progrès...

qui te dis que j'étais pas bourré quand j'ai corrigé ça?

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Since our last summer vacation, several exiting and funny experiments happened to me.

First I met a lady called Sarah at London airport. I found her pretty sexy, and we fell in love immediatly ;-) . Our relationship was wonderful until the time we had a horrible argument that led us to a break up.

It's a pitty because sarah was the sexiest little piece of chick i've ever shagged...

Then, to forget about her, I decided to devote myself to sports. The bungee jump was an incredible experience! (almost as exciting as sarah's handjobs)
I had an unbelieveble shot of pure adrenaline!

I tried prachute jumping after that too, but it wasn't that cool. As an end, I went scuba divin'.. this sport requires loads of energy, but it was superb!

To my opinion, within these 3 extremes activities, parachute jumping was the least exciting and the least fun experience I had. I think that bungee jumping wasn't as exciting as scuba divin' but much more than sarah's small bubbies!

Thanks to this ***** up little b****, I could experience a wide range of intersting activities.

how'bout that?

sorry, please do not hold me a #### for the stupid jokes...

but I corrected your english. (you should get a 20/20 wiv' that thing!)

husker, bien essaye mais ya tout autant de faute que dans l'original... bah, ca me feras un post serieux en plus pour ta liste! 8-)

edit: 'tin, c'est hyper technologique IDN, ca censure meme l'anglais grossier!

exemple: Suck my big fat cock you god damn mother ####ing son a bitch!

edit2: ah ben non... pas tout...

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tu me surprends pas trop en disant ça, mon anglais est encore très limité surtout pour écrire, mais je progresse....

note : un post sérieux pour atryu

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note : un post sérieux pour atryu

on se detend! j'y ai quand meme introduit furtivement 2 ou 3 sales petites blagues...

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atryu a écrit :
It's a pitty because sarah was the sexiest little piece of chick i've ever shagged...

...(almost as exciting as sarah's handjobs)...

...sarah's small bubbies!...

des blagues dans le genres, qui n'ont aucun rapport avec le sexe (je comprend pas tout mais bon).

faut croire que suck, dick, etc.. ne sont pas des mots grossiers, donc par conséquent, s'insèrent facilement dans une phrase courante qui ne présentera pas de caractère choquant.

Répondre à husker

nan, sur les forums anglais, ca passe pas!

ex: www.gamefaqs.com

tu peux meme pas poster que tu suces un bonbon!

(suck passe pas!, dick, cock, ass, bitch, "son of a" tous ca passe pas!)

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vaut mieux pas que j'essaie les forums en anglais, je serai directement classé dans la catégorie boulet qui fait une faute par mot...so I trust you

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ouais, les forums in Ingliche sont super moderes! je pourrais pas me permettre le 10e des conneries que je poste sur IDN.

les fautes, c'est pas tres importants, vu que des gens de tous pays postent sur les forums en anglais des fautes, yen a plein, mais c'est vrai que le language sms et encore plus meprise que chez nous.

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J'ai juste une petite question de vocabulaire, et oui ce qu'il y a de plus difficile a apprendre, c'est quoi bubbies??? Je me demande bien, et je pense que ca pourrait m'etre assez utile

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c'est un autre mot pour breasts, boobs, titties, ce qui signifie seins, poitrine, nichons.

breasts est mieux voir boobies, en plus familier, bien sur

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Fearoth a écrit :
c'est un autre mot pour breasts, boobs, titties, ce qui signifie seins, poitrine, nichons.

breasts est mieux voir boobies, en plus familier, bien sur

Merci bien, je savais que ca pouvais etre utile ;-)

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Bonsoir voila on m'a dit que l'on pourrait m'aider à améliorer mon anglais. je suis en galere j'ai un résumé à rendre et je suis pas bon en langues si quelqu'un pourrait me corriger merci infiniment. voivi le résumé:

This article reveals American industrialists’ practices notably the
Raimondo’s company close to Bush, which outsourced their
production in China, for worries of competitiveness. These
decisions are supported by the Bush administration which sees in
the outsourcing, a means to save the American firms. However
they are criticized by the democrat Kerry who compares them
with treason. Economic stake is important because sales resulting
from the outsourcing bring back more double from sales to the
American exportation.

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The economic stake (rajoute l'article défini c'est mieux)
"more double" sorry je comprends pas trop :s

Mais à part ça je ne vois pas la moindre erreur...

Répondre à Angi_86

more double pourrait signifié "plus du double"

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y'a pa kk1 ki peut coriger :s

I dreamed...two days ago I dreamed...I dreamed about my ideal school. I know it was just a dream that will never realise.
I remenber, it is a boarding school in Finland, in the midts of snowy mountains, near a ice lake. At first sight, it is a huge black manor house with two donjons and a enormous forest around. There are ice bariers in front of the entrance and barred windows. Inside, when you step in, you must see a lot of staircases that lead at rooms, classrooms, recording studios, village halls, viewing rooms and others. The castle is divised in four ; two donjons, one school building and one community centre.
All of students are boarders. Every morning, they get up at 8 o’clock for breakfast. The fry-up take place in the canteen. The pupils left the donjon that they sleep and go to eat. They have choices, they can eat bacon, eggs, pancakes, yoghourts, soda breads, raisin breads, sugarloafs, flapjacks, hotcakes, cakes, croissants, nutella, jam, marmalade, smarties and many other delicacies. It’s appetizing and tasty.
When they terminate, they make toward school building. The pupils have a class at 9 o’ clock with the subject what they want. They have three periods with a break in the morning. The subjects which are put forwards are Phisics, Biology, Chemistry, Zoology, Electronics, Botany, Mathematics, History, Geography, English, German, French, Spanish, Finnish and Latin. The teaching staff is likable, versed and conniving. The teachers tutor and help all off students. They have sence of humour and are very nice. All of them are graduate from Harvard and speak Finnish and English very well. The atmoshepere in the classroom is congenial. The schoolboys can speak with theirs neighbours. The classrooms are enblazon. During the courses, they hear heavy metal and the teacher. It’s very laid-back. Over the break , they may stay in the classroom or else go out for play.
As soon as the bell ring out, the youth walk toward the canteen owing to eat. Contrary to breakfast, they write in a note-book what they desire to taste. Once it’s ready, they are call. They may eat everywhere ; in the classroom, in the dormitory, in the high school gym or the canteen. The meals are copious, for the dessert , they can command ice creams, cakes, yoghourts and fruits.
Once everybody finish to eat, each teenager chose what he want participate in the afternoon. Various activities are proposed in the community centre. This boarding school is specialized in musik , in particular in heavy metal, thrash metal, black metal or grind. This is the reason why there are chieffly musical activities such as play the drums, play the electric guitar or others instruments. There are in the community school two recordings studios for records, a extensive record library , rooms to listen to music and rooms to sing. However, people who don’t like music can make sport, there are a olympic swimming pool with a cannon for boot out the pupils in the water, a stadium, a badminton court, ballpark, golf links, bowling green, basketball court, soccer field and playing field. Near the boarding school, in the ice lake, they can ice skate. What is more, hikes are proposed in the forest. There are too, a informatic room and a library. They can change activities in the afternoon.
At seven o’clock, they go to bathrooms and until the dinner at nine o’clock, they make what they want. After, they eat in the canteen like so lunch. At night, they go to the concert of heavy metal in the basement or they go to the cinema in the manor. There are ten rooms in the cinema. If they want, the youth rent a DVD and see it in their bedrooms. At midnight, all of pupils must be in their dortory. In the dortory, every have your bedroom and your shower. This is a day in this grammar school.

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J'aurais besoin de quelqu'un pour me corriger ça (fautes et grammaire et structure)

Hello,
We present you Hawaii City.
In Hawaii City, Is always summer.
In Elaina's avenue, there are one hospital, three houses, one hotel and one police station.
In Vero's boulevard, there are two appartment buildings, one restaurant, one bank and one office.
In the Reb's street, there are one office, a airport, a city hall, a school and a restaurant.
In Laurie's street, there are one house, a bar and a forest.
For means of transportations, there are a subway, a monorail, a car, a bicycle and a airplane.

There are several jobs in Hawaii City. For instance, at the school, they can be professor, janitor, secretary, etc...

Merci!

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Bonjour j'ai écris un texte est-ce que vous pouvez m'aider a le corriger ? svp.

Is it a mother, or not?

G.M.: I’m with Mr.J.Jones. Can you tell us your story, please?
J.Jones: It was 20 years ago, when my mother began.
G.G.: Began what?
J.J.: To touch me.
G.M.: How old were you when she began?
J.J.: I was 13 years old. Every night when my brother and I were going to sleep she read us a story. After when we were on our bed she came to wish us good night. At first she gave me a kiss on the plays, than on the lips. (Silence) Than a little bit later she began to touch me, my sex. About three month later she began to rape me. I was so young, I didn’t understand. She said me that it was normal. (Silence)
G.M.: Why didn’t you leave your home?
J.J.: I was young and belong all the time she raped me she didn’t touch my brother. I wanted to protect him.
G.M.: But when you’ve leave home?
J.J.: When I’ve left home she redid the same with my brother. But he was very vulnerable, he died three years later. (Silence)
G.M.: What do you want now?
J.J.: I want that everybody know how cruel my mother is. I want that she pay for all she’d made. She made us so suffer.
G.M.: if you can say something to your mother. What was it?
J.J.: Go on hell.
G.M.: Well, thank you Mr. Jones.

Information: 3,7 % of the rapists are women and 8,8% of the victims are men.

merci d'avance

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bonjour je dois faire un commentaire de texte en anglais je l'ai rédigé avec mes idées mais je pense avoir fait de grosses fautes de temps et de syntaxe est ce que quelqu'un accepterais de lire mon texte ( 1 pages 1/2) et de me dire les fautes qui l'aurais vu merci d'avance . :

the document is a press article comming from an british new's paper : The guardian published on May 31, 2002.
It is entitled " don't eat too much of our food " warns Mc Donald and thank's to it's informative headline we can guess that

the article it about Mc Donald 's wish to justify the importance of their products within the framework of a balanced diet.
Indeed reading the article we can notice reasons of the advertising campaign launched by Mc donald, the means has using and

finally consequences of this one among consumers.

At firstly, we are going to talk about the differents reasons for MC donald to test a frank campaign.

The first reason is an legitimacy one, indeed we can note reading all the texte that Mc donald try to legitimate the sale of

this product for every comsumers that is to say children and adults persons.

The second reason is a appeal one, so the giant of fast food would like to get a favorable verdict of the public opinion,

althougt today health, the balanced diet are in fashion and the reduction of the part devoted to food in the all budget ; Mc

Donald attempt to do one ranks in the french's food trade.
This aim being to appeal to every means.

Next , another reason is a financial one in spite of the poxer of Mc Donald in the fast food industry , it wish to persuade

more people, to increase his economic power in the world .

In a mutshell, we can note that there is diffrents reasons for Mc DOnald to launch this campaign to be more effective, the

giant of the fast food has using many means .

The first key point being the frankness,so indeed the headline mentions we shouldn't eat too much of their food, Mc Donald

warns indirectly the risks nevertheless it doesn't forbidden this food.

The second point being to persuade people, is the quality, so l10 we can quote that MC donald guarantees to bring from

consumers some good food ( for the health )
Indeed it asserts " that it's bugers are 100% meat " and " no fat is added in the grilling of the meat ".

Now let's talk about the third means which has being the credibility with consumers, Mc Donald has been having two

nutritionists support, it's very important in spite of the fears the consumers has been rassured.

what's more the opinion of nutritionnist seems sound , indeed we can read l5 and l16 that it doesn't advice for consumers

especially for children to eat too much food's Mc Donald , but that this point isn't new and that it's same for all " you

shouldn't doo anything too often " , so it's the exess which is dangerous.

The 4nd means it's the media , Mc donald has been using especially papers , l3 " women's magazines " which allows him to

reach much people of differents socioprofessional group.

Mc donald has been putting best means at his disposal to persuade the consumer to eat his food. This campaign has been having

consequences on consumers whom we are going to see.

The first direct consequence is the seduction. The consumer is going to become only one , with his family or with his

friends. He is feel on his place.

Then , there is a second consequence for consumers is the risk , indeed athought there has been being opinion of two

nutritionists , the consumer doesn't understand his borders , the word " exess " isn't clear for people.

The first risk we can determine is a medical one , indeed Mc Donald offers products rich in lipid and carbohidrate (

brung especially by sauces ) which are vital to live , but in excess are possible cause disease such as the diabete , the

cholesterol and disease cardiovasculare.

the second risk of campaingn by Mc Donald at consumers is a economic risk, because to eat this type of products has a

cost. For some families with not enough financial ressources, it can return their more difficult situation.

What's more we can to anticipate a social risk, each memebers of the family chosen a special menu so they don't share
meals, then there are less dialogue, we can notice a individualization trend.

Lastly, a cultural risk, especially for children who choose fast food rather than of the good food : traditionnal or

from the world, they don't open in others cultures.

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voila je souhaiterai savoir si ma phrase est correcte ou si je dois rectifier quelque chose "i d'ont know when i meet you again but i will wait" merci d'avance

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